Just Teasing – Six Sentence Sunday

24 Jun

Another playful moment in  Clear As Day. I had great fun writing the secondary characters in this story and in this scene, Kay watches newbie Margie getting an up close look at a catfish for the first time:

“This one’s just a little baby.” Lloyd patted his “little baby.” The channel catfish weighed eight pounds, easy. “Have to be careful when you go swimming out in the deep water, Margie baby.” His voice dropped to a rolling old-pirate, tall-tale cadence. “They say there’s some out there a couple a hundred pounds, could just slurp a little thing like you right up.”

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Channel Catfish

(Luckily for Margie, the average channel catfish runs 2-4 pounds, with a top end size of 40-50 pounds. ;) )

Photo: Brian Gratwicke CC-BY-2.5 Wikipedia

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31 Responses to “Just Teasing – Six Sentence Sunday”

  1. Alix Cameron June 24, 2012 at 8:09 am #

    Slurp is such a great word!

  2. dmburton72 June 24, 2012 at 8:18 am #

    What fun! I can just imagine her panic. :)

    • Babette James June 24, 2012 at 8:46 am #

      Hi, Diane. Oh, yes, and then one of the guys demonstrates how to clean a fish… :D

  3. Joya Fields June 24, 2012 at 9:54 am #

    Aaaah! Now that’s a scary fish. Glad they’re not usually that big. Nice six. :)

    • Babette James June 24, 2012 at 10:15 am #

      Hi, Joya. lol I came across some great pictures of huge catfish. Some of them were just, whoa!

  4. Cera duBois June 24, 2012 at 10:14 am #

    LOL! I’m sure she won’t go into the deep water now…. Great six!

  5. Elin Gregory June 24, 2012 at 10:48 am #

    That’s actually quite scary. :D Nice six.

  6. Dee Carney June 24, 2012 at 12:13 pm #

    This made me smile. I like him!

    • Babette James June 24, 2012 at 12:25 pm #

      Hi, Dee, thanks. Lloyd’s one of my favorite characters in this story.

  7. maccrowne June 24, 2012 at 12:51 pm #

    Lloyd made me smile, Babette, but EWWW! I’d never swim again!

  8. Kimberly K. Comeau June 24, 2012 at 1:36 pm #

    I can just hear his Southern drawl. Excellent excerpt! Thanks for sharing it.

  9. veronicascott June 24, 2012 at 1:45 pm #

    Oh, and she probably believes him. (Catfish don’t actually eat people – right? LOL!) Loved this six!

    • Babette James June 24, 2012 at 1:56 pm #

      Thanks, Veronica. lol Fortunately, they prefer aquatic insect larvae, crayfish, mollusks, and small fish.

  10. Silver James June 24, 2012 at 2:34 pm #

    :lol: Babette! Good thing that was a channel cat and not a mud cat. Around here, they do get big enough to slurp just about anything they want! I love your secondary characters. They add so much to your stories.

    • Babette James June 24, 2012 at 2:40 pm #

      Hi, Silver, thanks! I was always glad never to run into a really big one. :)

  11. K.E. Saxon June 24, 2012 at 7:31 pm #

    What a fun six! (I actually had a fried catfish po-boy for lunch, lol! Don’t worry, it wasn’t Margie =D)

    • Babette James June 24, 2012 at 7:46 pm #

      Thanks! lol ! Catfish does make a yummy sandwich.

  12. Sarah June 24, 2012 at 7:54 pm #

    Haha! I would have loved to have seen Margie’s reaction to that. I imagine a sarcastic comment followed by a roll of the eyes but who knows, maybe she’ll second guess a shadow in the water for the Jaws of all catfish. :D Thanks for visiting my blog!

    Sarah @ The Writer’s Experiment

    • Babette James June 24, 2012 at 8:00 pm #

      Hi, Sarah! You’re welcome. lol Poor Margie doesn’t have a sarcastic bone in her body, but this does lead to a sweet little moment with her husband. :)

  13. Angela Quarles June 24, 2012 at 8:07 pm #

    Great scene, I could totally hear his dialogue as he teased Margie. Great choice of words!

  14. A.S. Fenichel June 24, 2012 at 8:21 pm #

    Nice little tease!

  15. Donna Cummings June 24, 2012 at 9:16 pm #

    This was delightful! I loved the “tall-tale cadence”. Very nice six.

  16. Kate Warrren June 24, 2012 at 10:00 pm #

    That’s a cute six!

  17. Karen Michelle Nutt June 25, 2012 at 1:22 am #

    That would be one scary fish. Slurp! No swimming for me. Thank you very much. lol Great six!

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